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雅思寫作想要寫出好文章,要注意避開一些誤區,一起來看一下:

 

一、避免空洞的單詞和詞組

1.一些空洞的單詞或詞組根本不能為句子帶來任何相關的或重要的信息,完全可以被刪掉。

比如:When all things are considered, young adults of today live more satisfying lives than those of their parents, in my opinion

 

這句話當中的“when all things are considered”和“in my opinion“都顯得多餘。完全可以去掉。改為:Young adults of today live more satisfying lives than their parents

 

2.有些空洞和繁瑣的表達方式可以進行替換

例如:Due to the fact that our grandparents were under an obligation to help their parents, they did not have the options that young people have at this point in time

 

due to the fact that”就是一個很典型的繁瑣的表達方式的例子,可以替換,簡化為下面的表達方式:

 

Because our grandparents were obligated to help their parents, they did not have the options that young people have now

 

二、避免重複單字

1. 盡量避免重複使用同樣的單字。或者有的時候雖然單字沒有重複,但意思卻有重複。這時候可以做一些簡化的工作。例如下面這個例子:The farm my grandfather grew up on was large in size

 

large對一個farm來說就是size方面的large,所以in size可以去掉,改為:The farm my grandfather grew up on was large

 

更簡潔的表達方式為:My grandfather grew up on a large farm

 

2.有時一個詞組可以用一個更簡單的單詞來替換,例如:My grandfather has said over and over again that he had to work on his parents' farm

 

這裡的over and over again就可以改為repeatedly,顯得更為簡潔:My grandfather has said repeatedly that he had to work on his parents' farm

 

三、選擇最恰當的文法結構

選擇合適的文法結構可以使句子意思的表達更為精確和簡練。雖然文法的多樣性也很重要,但選擇最恰當的文法仍然是更為重要的因素。以下原則是在考慮選擇哪種文法時可以參考的原則:

 

1.一個句子的主詞和動詞,要能夠表達句子中的最重要的意思

例如:The situation that resulted in my grandfather's not being able to study engineering was that his father needed help on the farm

 

從意思上來分析,上面這句話需要表達的重要的概念是“grandfather's not being able to study”,而在表達這個概念時,原句用的主語是situation,謂語動詞是was,不能強調需要表達的重點概念,可以改為下面這句話:My grandfather couldn't study engineering because his father needed help on the farm

 

2. 避免頻繁使用“there be”用法

例如下面的句子:There were 25 cows on the farm that my grandfather had to milk every day. It was hard work for my grandfather

可以改為:My grandfather worked hard. He had to milk 25 cows on the farm every day

更簡潔的句式為:My grandfather worked hard milking 25 cows daily

 

3. 把從屬子句改為片語或單字

例如:Dairy cows were raised on the farm, which was located100 kilometers from the nearest university and was in an area that was remote

簡潔的表達方式為:The dairy farm was located in a remote area, 100 kilometers to the nearest university

 

4. 僅在需要強調受詞而不是主詞的時候,才使用被動語態

例如:In the fall, not only did the cows have to be milked, but also the hay was mowed and stacked by my grandfather's family

本句不夠簡潔的原因是本句的重心應該是“忙碌的家庭-my grandfather's family”,而使用了被動語態後,彷彿重心變成了cowshay。下面的表達方式是主動語態,相對來說更簡潔一些:In the fall, my grandfather's family not only milked the cow but also mowed and stacked the hay

 

5. 用更為精確的一個動詞來代替片語

例如:My grandfather didn't have time to stand around doing nothing with his school friends

Stand around doing nothing其實可以用一個動詞來表達,即loiterMy grandfather didn't have time to loiter with his school friends

 

6. 有時兩個句子透過組合,可以用一句話來簡潔表達

例如:Profits from the farm were not large. Sometimes they were too small to meet the expenses of running a farm. They were not sufficient to pay for a university degree

 

兩個句子透過組合成下面這句更為簡潔的句子:

Profits from the farm were sometimes too small to meet operational expenses, let alone pay for a university degree

 

以上就是幫大家整理出幾個常見的地雷區,希望大家都能在寫作上用更簡潔有力的表達獲取雅思高分。

 

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