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2020年1月18日雅思獨立寫作題目

今天孩子享有的自由太多了嗎？

Some people think that children nowadays have too much freedom. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

【解析&審題】

題材：孩子教育

題型：雙邊討論（推薦）

關鍵詞：children（孩子）+ freedom（自由）

需要討論的觀點：現在，孩子得到的自由是不是太多了？

復現情況：新題

相似題目：In many parts of the world, children have more freedom than they used to have. Is this a positive or negative development? (2017/7/8)

很多人認為，孩子現在享受到的自由比以前多，已經達到有害的地步了（自由太多就是有害的意思）。本題要求考生對這個話題發表觀點。

孩子擁有很多的自由，這究竟是一件好事還是壞事？這個問題，顯然應該進行分類雙邊討論：就有些自由而言（比如缺乏監管，自由使用電腦等），太多的話顯然會影響孩子的學習和性格發展，但就另外一些自由而言（比如自由思考，自由做負責任的決定），顯然就不存在過多的問題，而且越多越好。因此，本題的基本發展思路依然是分類討論，即對題目中的關鍵詞進行分類，然後分別進行討論，隨後得出自己的觀點。

【老師筆記】

01．Children today are apparently enjoying more freedom than ever before. This is so because the technological advances have relieved children of much of their manual labor and because parents and schools these days are far less restrictive than they were.

今天的孩子顯然比以往任何時候都享有更多的自由。之所以如此，是因為科技的進步把孩子們從體力勞動中解放出來，也因為現在父母和學校給孩子的限制比過去要小得多。

解析

（1）本段提出需要討論的現象，並簡單地分析了原因。

（2） Apparently 顯然地

（3） Manual labor 手工勞動

（4） Restrictive 限制性的

02．It may turn out to be a bad thing that children have too much free time at their disposal . Without the supervision of their parents and teachers, many children end up being addicted to computer games or other unhealthy habits. This is detrimental to both their academic development and character formation. In contrast, children before had to help their parents do the housework and they did not have calculators or computers to help them with their maths, so they would have to spend much time on all these tasks during which they learned the value of hard work and cooperation.

孩子們有太多的空閒時間可以支配，這可能是件壞事。沒有父母和老師的監督，許多孩子最終沉迷於電腦遊戲或者其他不健康的習慣。這對他們的學習進步和性格形成都是不利的。相反，以前的孩子們不得不幫助他們的父母做家務，他們也沒有計算器或計算機來幫助他們的數學，所以他們將不得不花很多時間在所有這些任務上，而在這些任務中，他們學會了努力工作和合作的價值。

解析

（1）本段論證如果孩子有太多自己支配時間的自由，可能會對其學習和性格形成不利。

（2） At their disposal 供他們支配

（3） Supervision 監督

（4） End up 結果淪為......

（5） Be addicted to... 對......上癮

（6） Detrimental 有害的

03．Yet this does not mean that children should not enjoy that much freedom. In fact, I would argue for the benefits freedom can bring to children. When given the freedom of time and mind, children can fully explore their own potentials instead of being told to do things they are not really interested in. If a child has a strong passion for music, but is forced to spend much of his time on some more “practical” subjects like physics and chemistry, his talent for music may be wasted and he will never be happy in life. Meanwhile, freedom also breeds independence and responsibility. When left free to make their own decisions, many children actually become more independent and responsible.

然而，這並不意味著孩子不應該享受那麼多的自由。事實上，我主張自由可以給孩子帶來諸多好處。如果有時間和思想的自由，孩子們可以好好發掘自己的潛力，而不是被告知去做他們不真正感興趣的事情。如果一個孩子對音樂有強烈的熱情，但被迫把大部分時間花在像物理和化學這樣更“實用”學科上，他的音樂天賦就可能會被浪費，他在生活中永遠不會快樂。同時，自由也孕育著獨立和責任。當孩子們能夠自由做出自己的決定時，他們實際上變得更加獨立和有責任感。

解析

（1）本段討論有些自由對孩子們的成長和幸福非常有利。

（2） Argue for 支持......; 主張......

（3） Explore 探索

（4） Potential 潛力

（5） To have a strong passion for... 非常喜愛......

（6） Breed 孕育

04．To conclude, some kinds of freedom, if given too much, may be harmful to children, but when it comes to free mind and free choice, there can never be too much of them.

總之，有些類型的自由，如果給予太多，可能會對兒童有害，但當涉及到自由的思想和自由的選擇，永遠不可能有太多的自由。

解析

（1）本段表明觀點，並回答題目的問題：有些自由太多對孩子不好，有些自由再多都不為過。

（2） When it comes to... 當談到......；至於......

（3） There can never be too much of... ......永遠都不會太多

【高分範文】

Children today are apparently enjoying more freedom than ever before. This is so because the technological advances have relieved children of much of their manual labor and because parents and schools these days are far less restrictive than they were. 

It may turn out to be a bad thing that children have too much free time at their disposal. Without the supervision of their parents and teachers, many children end up being addicted to computer games or other unhealthy habits. This is detrimental to both their academic development and character formation. In contrast, children before had to help their parents do the housework and they did not have calculators or computers to help them with their maths, so they would have to spend much time on all these tasks during which they learned the value of hard work and cooperation.

Yet this does not mean that children should not enjoy that much freedom. In fact, I would argue for the benefits freedom can bring to children. When given the freedom of time and mind, children can fully explore their own potentials instead of being told to do things they are not really interested in. If a child has a strong passion for music, but is forced to spend much of his time on some more “practical” subjects like physics and chemistry, his talent for music may be wasted and he will never be happy in life. Meanwhile, freedom also breeds independence and responsibility. When left free to make their own decisions, many children actually become more independent and responsible.

To conclude, some kinds of freedom, if given too much, may be harmful to children, but when it comes to free mind and free choice, there can never be too much of them. (294 words)

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