3月12日雅思寫作：
In modern world, it is no longer necessary to use animals for food or use animal products, for instance, clothing and medicines. To what extent do you agree or disagree?
人們不需要用動物做為食物來源以及使用動物製品，比如衣服，藥物等等。你是否同意？
提綱：
立場：同意
先讓步，別人認為不吃肉可能會營養不良。反駁：其實很多植物含有豐富營養的蛋白質，而且素食者也非常健康。
沒有必要使用動物皮毛製作高檔奢侈的包包或者衣服，人造革也很保暖時尚。
有人認為我們需要利用動物做一些藥物研究，反駁：實際上動物和人類的基因有差別，就算研究了也不一定有價值。
Throughout the history, animals have been used for food, clothing, and medicine on behalf of human beings. However, in my opinion, due to the rapid advancement of technology, nowadays, we can actually have some alternatives to substitute for animal products and free them from pains.
點評：
遇到agree or disagree類型的作文，開頭段落建議給出清晰明朗的立場：這裡是，我們可以使用其他物品替代動物，以此來減輕動物的痛苦。
參考詞彙：
on behalf of： 為了XX的利益
substitute for ：代替，常常可以用於替換寫爛了的 replace.
One reason people avoid being vegetarian is the concern of an unbalanced diet and limited choices without meat. However, such concern is not as big of a deal as people make it out to be and it is more perceived than real. In fact, when they become real savvy vegetarian, they will find out more and more hidden high protein and nutritious food, such as whole grains, nuts, and various kinds of vegetables. These earthy and natural ingredients have been proved to be beneficial for people's physical well being. Nowadays, many people are vegetarian due to political or religious reasons and they are also very healthy.
點評：
這裡有一句比較萬能的句子供大家記憶：such concern is not as big of a deal as people make it out to be and it is more perceived than real. 這句話的意思是說，人們很多顧慮是杞人憂天，其實是過慮了。這個句子就可以用於很多讓步段的寫作，先說別人認為這麼做可能有某些壞處，但實際上，是過慮 了。
參考詞彙：
vegetarian: 素食主義者
perceive：感覺
savvy：某某行家
earthy and natural ingredients：天然食物
Apart from using animals for food, people also take advantages of their fur to produce luxury bags or clothes in commercial market. There are many animal fur factories in which animals are slaughtered for their fur so they have to endure tremendous pain because of human vanity. Such practice is cruel and inhuman. In fact, with technology developing, artificial leathers can be the substitution for animal fur, which is economical, environmental friendly and also fashionable. For example, many designers insist using artificial materials for their clothing design and those clothes are quite popular in European countries.
VIVI點評：
這裡開頭的apart from using animals for food 能夠更好地銜接上下兩個段落，但是又沒有in addition, 之類的那麼簡單粗暴。是cohesion & coherence 得分法寶。
參考詞彙：
slaughter ： 屠殺
endure tremendous pain ：忍受巨大的痛苦
vanity：虛榮
cruel and inhuman：殘忍不人道
artificial leather：人造革
Lastly, in terms of medicine experiment, proponents claim that it is necessary to use animals for medical testing in order to make more breakthrough in current complex diseases. However, it is a fact that there is genetic disparity between human beings and animals, so those testings might not have relevant result and animals just suffer for no reason.
參考詞彙：
proponents: 支持者
genetic disparity: 基因差別。可以替換用爛了的 differences
From what has been analyzed above, people can still maintain their quality of life without hurting or killing animals since we can have other alternatives for replacement in terms of food, clothing and medicine.
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